The Bill Collector (Manuscript)



When a collections specialist named Lorenzo is ordered to pay back a loan from a loan shark, he goes to desperate extremes in order to do so. The loan shark”s nephew, Omar, is ordered to follow him and live with him to make sure he doesn’t escape, and the two of them develop an unexpected relationship. When they both wind up at a gospel choir practice, things begin to change for both of them.

Dove Review

This is an interesting read. I read it straight through. The characters are very well defined, especially Lorenzo, Omar, Frankie and Kasheera. A supervisor at a collections agency, named Lorenzo, owes a loan shark some big bucks. Pay day finally comes and he has a limited time to pay off the loan or he will wind up in a cement block in the lake. The loan shark’s nephew, Omar, is ordered to live with Lorenzo to make sure he doesn’t escape. When Lorenzo and Omar wind up at a Christian choir practice and the Life Enrichment Center, the plot becomes more and more interesting. The script includes some humorous moments, such as when Lorenzo displays his biblical ignorance by stating that Samson fought the giant Goliath, and he quotes the Bible with the Emma Lazarus poem on the Statue of Liberty: “Come unto me all you who are tired and poor..the huddled masses..longing..” And he concludes a short speech by saying, “As Tiny Tim said, ‘God bless us everyone'”. Omar shines when he plays a song on the piano at the center, and the response of the audience causes him to brush tears away from his eyes. This includes some mature themes such as a few violent scenes, and we are recommending the read for ages twelve plus. This story shows a definite growth in the characters and we gladly award it our Dove “Family-Approved” Seal. I can’t wait to see the movie!

Content Description

Sex: Man closely looks at woman's legs.
Language: G-4; Cr*p-1; H-2; H-2 (as a location)
Violence: A character is cut on the ear with a switchblade; a man is pushed into the water; some men are killed by guns as an act of vengeance.
Drugs: Beer drinking; smoking.
Nudity: Cleavage.
Other: A character gambles; lies to someone when he loses his money and says his wallet was stolen; some other lies are told; a moped is stolen; a character tries to rip off his boss's company.


Company: Unknown
Genre: Drama
Industry Rating: Not Rated
Reviewer: Edwin L. Carpenter